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read me, seymour. read me.

Today, I'm getting the crit kicked out of me!

Roni Griffin, a la Fiction Groupie is hosting The Beta Club, in which writers post a 750-ish-word excerpt from their WIP and get amazing critique and feedback.

It's my day.

Please read my excerpt and leave your feedback here. (FYIspice, my excerpt is the first 750-ish words from my very own Chapter One.)

I said please! Now, go. What are you waiting for?

Also, if you are remotely interested in things writerly, you'd better follow Roni. She. is. incrediblespice.

Thank you for your cooperation.

Why are you still here?

You're supposed to go here.

Comments

Unknown said…
Hi Amber! Just a quick hello and to let you know how much I enjoyed your excerpt posted over on Roni's blog! You're a talented writer, sista! Thanks for sharing your work with us :)

~Nicole
LMAO! Yes, ma'm. On my way. :)
Talli Roland said…
Hehe! I'm going, I'm goingspice.

Gone.
Yvonne Osborne said…
You'll see me tonight....when I'm not at workspice.
I agree with a lot of what they said over there.. my first impressions were more action, ditch mr. and mrs., and show me something already. looking good.
@ Nicole -- Thanks so much for the compliment. It means a lot, actually, to have you meander over here and tell me that. :)

@sarahjayne
@talli
@pinkflipflops

Thanks for reading!

@Yvonne -- Let me know what you think!
Roni Loren said…
Thanks for the volunteering and I'm glad you had a good experience today! I feel honored to get a spice compliment, too. :) You rock.
Tina Lynn said…
Already been. *sloppy kisses*
Ashley Stone said…
I went. I read. I loved!

You are so talented! You definitely know how to paint and image. I could clearly picture what you were saying. Loved the part about "if this were a movie..."

Very brave to share your story like that and open it up to critique! I don't think I could do that!

When I get my role on Glee, and you're a famous writer, I'll have my people call you're people and we'll do lunch and "remember when...."
; )

xoxo
carissajade said…
Girl you are awesome. i heart your writing.
Unknown said…
LOL Stop yelling at me!!! I already went over there!!! Your excerpt was awesome! You are very talented!

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